The waves tried to rip us apart as we clung together in one final embrace on that long ago beach The taste of salt coated my lips and tongue salt water tears stung my eyes Drying salt abraided my skin and clothes or was it the sand? The wind tore your final words from my ears. Did you whisper "I'll love you forever" or 'I'm leaving forever"?
So beautiful! ๐
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Thanks, Sam.
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How come things like that have never happened to me?
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You just need a more vivid imagination. ๐
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So romantic, then heartbreaking at the end! And then, the movie reference.:-)
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Thanks, Priscilla for your kind remarks.
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Hmm ๐ค
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And?
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This is such a beautiful poem, Pat โค
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Thanks, Luisa. You are too kind. ๐
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Itโs well deserved praise! ๐
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Blushes.
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JeanMarie sent me an email with some unsolicited advice which I thought was good enough to share.
Iโm emailing this comment to you rather than posting it online because it contains the dreaded โUAโ (unsolicited advice). EEP!
I really like the poem โ except for the final stanza. It takes away some of the impact of the poem. The iconic photo from the film is enough. Even if the reader is not familiar with the film, the poem captures the essence of picture which is the key to a good ekphrastic poem. The artwork is a jump off point, and the poem shouldnโt be just a description of it, even if itโs a poetic description. Ekphrastic poems can be about abstract artwork.
This really is good. I mean, what a line: Fantastic!
The wind tore your final words
from my ears.
Thanks JeanMarie. The picture would make a better ending than the words. ๐
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You’re probably right about a partially remembered “From Here to Eternity” scene. I doubt A Salt on Your Senses was a scene from a Dr. Pepper commercial. ๐
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Since I’m not a Pepper fan, I would find that an assault on my taste buds at the very least. ๐
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It was all a dream!
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Quite possible. ๐
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Quite possible. ๐
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